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Robert Morein
 
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"Bret Ludwig" wrote in message
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Given a positively-price-sensitive market condition, substantially
higher quantities of product (leading to increased automation, design
to use more precise techniques on automated bases, etc.) and the use of
less expensive assembly labor-although that's a nominal part of the
whole package-it is absolutely and conclusively certain that the exact
quality of a current Linn table-arm-cartridge combination could be
reduced, probably drastically.


Bret, do you have a German-schtick you feel compelled to adhere to? Why do
you force the reader to wade through seven line sentences, with word counts
of fifty-one? It is extremely hard to read.

I actually read your bloated sentence. It contains interesting thoughts. But
you need to cut it into digestible pieces. Let's do that now:

"Lowering the price of a high-end product would result in substantially
greater sales. Increased automation would allow more precision of assembly,
with lower labor cost. I am absolutely positive that the quality of a
current Linn table-arm combination could be drastically reduced."

As we discover the meaning of this bloated monstrosity, further paraphrase
becomes possible:

"With the substitution of automation for human skill, assembly of a Linn
table-arm combination could be accomplished in a Chinese sweatshop, with
drastic reduction in quality."